Saturday, May 16, 2015

#Book Review - He Loves Me, He Loves YOU Not!

Synopsis: 

It's been years since their parents were murdered. Twin sisters Shia and Leigh are trying to readjust to life, while caring for their baby sister Remi. With the exception of Leigh’s angry, dramatic mood swings every now and then, everything seems to be going great. That is until Demetri; the mysterious stranger enters their midst, and falls right in the path of the newly single Shia. After dating Trent for so long, she is looking for a man to treat her like a queen, and Demetri is heaven sent...until inexplicable things begin to happen. When one of her sisters goes missing, and was last seen with Trent and Demetri, Shia suddenly realizes no one is who they appear to be. The seemingly normal world she and her sisters recreated is destroyed. Shia begins to realize that her parents' past deeds are coming back to haunt them all and no one can be trusted. It is unclear to Shia which man truly has her best interest - and safety - at heart. Staring at the wilted flower she calls life, she is slowly pulling back the layers to try to understand if He loves me, he loves you not...

Review:

This is a story I wouldn’t normally read, but it was offered to me on Bookbub for free, so I downloaded it and decided to give it a try. One thing I’ve often mentioned to my readers is just because you pay a lot of money for a book, doesn’t mean it’s good and just because a book is cheap or free, doesn’t make it bad. Welp, unfortunately, the latter holds true in this particular case.

After having read the synopsis, which by the way, I didn’t read before I started this book. I wanted to be surprised. The cover looked really hot and I thought, ‘what the hell?’ Umm, SURPRISE!!! Ok, there were so many problems with this story and it’s really hard to pinpoint where to begin, so I’m going to do my best to dissect this story by the problems I encountered while reading.

The very beginning of the story was strong. I was impressed with the strength of the writing and how the story was unfolding, but after the flow begins, you start to realize certain situations just don’t add up or make any kind of sense. It’s really hard to say what this story is about without giving away spoilers, which you already know, I do not do to any author. In keeping my word, I’ll try very hard to keep the main things out of this review for those of you who would like to read and haven’t yet. I believe this novel’s first publication was back in 2012. So its got a little dust on it, but a book is never too old or too late to read.

Ok, so here we go! Shia’s and Leigh’s parents were murdered in the Prologue. Next chapter, Shia is at the church waiting to marry the love of her life, Trent. Only problem was, Trent was a no show. Shia receives a telephone call advising her that her husband-to-be doesn’t plan to marry her. Hmm, you’d think a brotha could have advised a sista himself? Anyhoo, moving on. Leigh is wondering why Shia is so upset and she advises her that Trent doesn’t want to marry her. As you can probably guess, this is present day. The next chapter takes you back a few years as to how Shia met Trent.

As the story unfolds, not only does the editing of the book get worse, but so does the continuity of the story. There are situations and timelines that do not add up, and had an editor reviewed these things, they would most likely have caught them. Unfortunately, I can’t tell you what they are without giving away much of the story. What I can and will share with you is that this story was all over the place and really didn’t have much rhyme or reason to it. It appeared to be one of those stories wherein the writer took much of her imagination from a great deal of television and/or movies.

To the author’s credit, though, I will say that if she learns the proper way to outline a story and build a plot, she can be an amazing writer. I can definitely see the potential she has in telling a dramatic story, but the problem here was, it was just too many things going on. Too many circumstances that made absolutely no sense. And when you find out what led to all the drama throughout the book, you may find yourself scratching your head and wondering “huh?” If not, I know that’s how this story left me. I just couldn’t wrap my mind around what I just experienced.

When you get to the end of the novel, you’ll learn that this story is part of a series, and according to the information in the back, it advised there were plays made out of this story. Lord help the audience if this story doesn’t translate any better to the audience as it did to the reader. It makes for great drama, but it must make sense. Again, the timeline was extremely inconsistent and that frustrated me. I could pinpoint certain things the characters were doing that just didn’t add up as the story advanced.

Suffice it to say, Mello & June give this novel two stars. This is one of those books to take to your child’s soccer practice, or waiting in a doctor’s office, i.e., you know. . .some time to kill— this would be the novel to take along for the ride. Otherwise, I wouldn’t rush to read. The terrible editing, especially near the middle and end of the book, got worse as you forged ahead. I couldn’t take it. It’s really sad because this had the potential to be a great story, but it was pretty evident this book was written just to be in print. Not much care went into making sure the story gelled and vibed, and that’s really an injustice to the author. Perhaps the author needs to get a new publisher and/or editor, or both!

Kimberly Ranee Hicks, Author/Poet/Reviewer

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